I was looking forward to reading this book because I had just finished Trigger Effect by Maggie Price and was on a Bombshell high. I was ready for another awesome read. Instead, I ended up with a DNF.

Here’s the blurb about The Profiler:

FBI agent Angie Davis sees past the crime scene into the twisted criminal mind. It’s a skill she hones with the guidance of her mentor, Cain…one that helps Angie predict a killer’s next victim before it’s too late.

But this profiler-in-training’s latest case is a headache from the start. For one, she must work with maverick NYPD detective Carson Severo. And then, another kill. And another. Only this serial killer’s victims seem to follow a disturbing pattern — they are all somehow connected to Angie. And it’s just a matter of days before she becomes the next target.…

It sounded really promising. I’ve always been fascinated by profilers, have read several of the true crime books written by John E. Douglas and thought this was going to be a fun read. And then I got to the first sentence.

I lean my forearms into the open car window to get a better look at him. (copyright May 2005)

Do you know what that is? It’s first person, PRESENT tense. I actually like first person, when it’s past tense. Which would read instead: I leaned my forearms…

I made it to page 17. Of course, 8 of those pages were publishing info and dedication . The writing was, unfortunately, awkward and stilted. The first person present tense made it difficult to read and even more difficult to sink into the story.

Obviously I can’t comment on the merits of the plot, characterization or storyline as this was a DNF for me. But I did discover that first person, present tense causes a “blech” moment in me. Not recommended.

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