When you have a scene, most particularly with two people, be conscious of how often you’re using their names in the narrative. This is especially true in sex scenes, but it can be jarring to read the heroine’s name three times in a paragraph or ten times on a page. In this case, less is more, really. As long as the reader knows there’s one her and one him, one she and one he, in the scene, you only need to use their names for a little variety. It provides a more natural, intimate flow to the scene. If you read a scene where the name is repeated many, many times, you can get the feeling of a children’s book, which says the characters’ names to help the child remember and learn because repetition is good. You probably want to avoid that. Well. Unless you’re writing a children’s book.

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